tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-96614462536124980.post3539876654389232824..comments2018-06-02T18:34:29.250-07:00Comments on The Distance: Chapter 13Daydreamer-http://www.blogger.com/profile/01537071219550105161noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-96614462536124980.post-65090831844107927922009-06-23T12:42:36.230-07:002009-06-23T12:42:36.230-07:00I am SO HOOKED!! You really should continue this ...I am SO HOOKED!! You really should continue this story because I know that when I get to Chapter 33 and there's not more to read, I'm going to be mad at you! :)<br /><br />XOXOKellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06794200965421075125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-96614462536124980.post-83288719540582027832008-07-08T14:15:00.000-07:002008-07-08T14:15:00.000-07:00"this is blowjob worthy" I really found myself chu..."this is blowjob worthy" I really found myself chuckling at that one! You write very well and paint a great picture of your characters through their dialog and internal thoughts and I'm really liking all of the characters too-and that's so important!<BR/>I had issues with the age thing as well, but since you explained it in response to my questions, that helped and it is only jarring when the specifics of the tour are mentioned. In my mind, I just put it back in time to the era where Jon was actually that age.Opesterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01427651272156002103noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-96614462536124980.post-32895836556202220522008-07-05T16:32:00.000-07:002008-07-05T16:32:00.000-07:00Thanks for the comments!Sunstreaked - that's proba...Thanks for the comments!<BR/><BR/>Sunstreaked - that's probably a good idea about doing an author's note on the characters' ages. Did you read the comments I left after Chapter 7? Molly is 31, Keira is 33, so that would make Jon 34...I know it doesn't match up to his albums but it had to be that way if they were in high school together. I think I will put an author's note so people don't think I'm completely out of my mind. :)Daydreamer-https://www.blogger.com/profile/01537071219550105161noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-96614462536124980.post-33605192201911352442008-07-05T16:28:00.000-07:002008-07-05T16:28:00.000-07:00You have some really hysterical lines in your stor...You have some really hysterical lines in your story! Some laugh out loud and have other people in the room look at ya funny lines. <BR/><BR/>Slightly concerned about the ages of the characters though, they don't quite match like I'm sure you wanted them to. You might want to give that some thought or just do an author's note as I'm sure I can't be the only one who caught this! Just a suggestion as it kind of nags at the back of the mind when reading. <BR/><BR/>Molly is hysterical and like I said you really have a way with words there! <BR/><BR/>Will keep reading for sure.Sunstreakedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07144150267670415273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-96614462536124980.post-34179751811633480812008-07-05T15:15:00.000-07:002008-07-05T15:15:00.000-07:00I knew she was going to do that Ug!But I understan...I knew she was going to do that Ug!<BR/>But I understand. NOW I want to know what Jon will do next.. as I know he won't give up. <BR/><BR/>The convo about JBJ popping her cherry, lol.. I swear Molly is very much like a close GF of mine. <BR/><BR/>Loved it.Super_Kiwihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18000771355101318462noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-96614462536124980.post-16279617820997986322008-07-05T11:44:00.000-07:002008-07-05T11:44:00.000-07:00Well, my friend, not only did you close that door ...Well, my friend, not only did you close that door again – this time you boarded it up and nailed it shut.” Love this! Perfect ending line!<BR/><BR/>I am oh so glad to find your story! I am so hooked now I should add yours to my file folder!<BR/><BR/>Great chapter!<BR/><BR/>Alice FayeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com